Reading looking to Football League for Premier League surviv

[JoshIlanBlogs]

Hi guys,

I am Josh Ilan, an aspiring football journalist and a long-suffering Barnet fan.

It would be much appreciated if you could read my article on how "Reading looking to Football League for Premier League survival". If you could rate article at the top of the page, that would be great - comments on either this forum or the blog would also be brilliant.

Link to article: http://joshilanblogs.wordpress.com/2013/01/31/reading-looking-to-football-league-for-premier-league-survival/

On a side note, you have a brilliant young talent in Michael Hector - was probably our best player last season!

Thanks in advance and best of luck for rest of season,

Josh

[TFF]

Hi Josh,

The Rock or Con Air?

[chilipepper91]

Welcome Josh.

Do you prefer red or blue Bountys?

[Scutterbucketz]

Who's Michael Hector?

[BenReadingFC]

Who's Michael Hector?

My thoughts exactly
WHO?

[JoshIlanBlogs]

Hi,

Thanks for reading!

I prefer Con Air and blue bounty's to answer your questions. Michael Hector is a young centre-back in the Reading academy, who spent time on-loan at my side Barnet last season, and was fantastic. He is now on-loan at Cheltenham

[Silver Fox]

Hi,

Thanks for reading!

I prefer Con Air

[Bandini]

Hi Josh and welcome to the board.

*twist and shout*

[Focher]

an aspiring football journalist

[melonhead]

Hi,

Thanks for reading!

I prefer Con Air and blue bounty's to answer your questions.

Correct!

[melonhead]

nice article.

[TFF]

nice article.

lolwut?

[melonhead]

so much easier to criticise than create innit.


just appreciating the effort

[royalZILLAAA]

Not bad for a player lining up against Stevenage, Crawley and Colchester in the past month.

All in all not a bad article. Akpan didn't line up against Crawley though.

[Kingsley Junior]

My opinion of the piece would vary depending on how old you are. Not bad if you are just a pre-uni teen; needs to be quite a bit better if you're actually in a position to properly "aspire" to be a journo...

One tip - proofread! "Four wins and a draw in their last five OUTFITS" - Akpan has not played against "Stevenage, CRAWLEY, and Colchester in the past month - "GarEth McCleary" is called "GarAth McCleary" - Le Fondre was playing in League Two 18 months ago rather than a few years ago...

Keep it up though... just give things a tightening up in future before looking for praise from your target readership!

[Alexander Litvinenko]

Or try this : http://www.guardian.co.uk/guardian-masterclasses/how-to-be-a-football-journalist-course

[JoshIlanBlogs]

First of all, thanks for the feedback. Completely agree about proofreading - need to check a lot better for the simple mistakes i.e. Akpan.

I am 16 by the way, so still got time on my side to improve, develop and refine skills.

Thanks for link to "How to be a football journalist" page. Very insightful and helpful

My opinion of the piece would vary depending on how old you are. Not bad if you are just a pre-uni teen; needs to be quite a bit better if you're actually in a position to properly "aspire" to be a journo...

One tip - proofread! "Four wins and a draw in their last five OUTFITS" - Akpan has not played against "Stevenage, CRAWLEY, and Colchester in the past month - "GarEth McCleary" is called "GarAth McCleary" - Le Fondre was playing in League Two 18 months ago rather than a few years ago...

Keep it up though... just give things a tightening up in future before looking for praise from your target readership!

[royalZILLAAA]

I am 16 by the way, so still got time on my side to improve, develop and refine skills.

Certainly off to a good start, keep at it.

[working class hero]

I just wonder which star we will sign from man utd? Or do we need to beat a club before we sign their talent...

[Pepe the Horseman]

At 16 years old that is a good effort and with time knowledge will grow as will attention to detail - I am sure you'll make a go of it if you keep to it. Its admirable you're having a go already - do keep on posting your articles over the coming weeks/months and i'm sure you'll get a lot of praise and criticism - just use any of the latter to help you improve as opposed to getting downhearted.

Henry Winter will probably retire in 10-15 years so you'll fill those shoes nicely.

Leave him alone you sex pest.